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Eric Mulliniks's avatar

"of frontline trees

that fought this land." Amazing wordplay with these two lines

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Josh Datko's avatar

Thank you! Appreciate you reading and stopping by.

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Benno's avatar

The sensuality and vividness you accomplished here is awesome! Another funny result of doing audio a lot, is that after hearing enough poems in your tone I now have a rendering of your voice in my mind when reading regardless of an audio track haha

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Josh Datko's avatar

I'm just playing the long game where I just will write a poem with fill-in-the-blanks and a backing track and the words will sudden appear to you. 😀

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and now Miguel's avatar

Man Josh, this was really dope. I love the audio. I love what you did with. That sounded really cool. And then the writing! Mind blowing I read it aloud , I need to continue to reread.

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Josh Datko's avatar

Yeah thanks! I tried for a more free-association/image/sound flow on this one.

The voice is doubled with a backmasked version which I thought helped with the uncomfortable undertone. And then the delay, I just really liked the rhythm it made!

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and now Miguel's avatar

Yeah, like this really impressed something on me. I felt the mood of this piece and it gave me a different feeling reading it aloud after listing. It was unsettling in a very good way. Nice sound design fam.

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Simon's avatar

I love the alliteration. It seems like your focus on spoken poetry has influenced your writing style! The flow here is fantastic.

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Josh Datko's avatar

Ah thanks Simon. This one especially I felt I was casting spells for sure :)

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Daniel V. Gaglio's avatar

"golden,

gelatinous,

gauze."

I love the look of that line and how it captures how fungus can look both beautiful and gross, often at the same time

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Josh Datko's avatar

Beautiful and gross 😀 yes what a perfect summary. Not to get all Last of Us here but I do think the Earth belongs to the fungi, they are just waiting for us to lie down.

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Justin Patrick Moore's avatar

I love the line of how the aspen rot in their unification... very striking!

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Josh Datko's avatar

Aspens trees are so unique with their connected root systems! Even down here in the foothills some grown.

I'm not actually sure if they all rot together like this (I do enjoy looking up these kind of things) but this particular fungus will for example grown on aspens and not conifers.

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Wil Price's avatar

The king of alliteration strikes again!

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Josh Datko's avatar

Perhaps it is my iambic pentameter 😀

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