I preferred the wavy version: It made me fell like a radio wave being broadcasted - it made me feel like coming into resonance as the structure became tighter.
Yeah, I wasn't sure if it worked, but figured to try it. Maybe I'll post it without the spaces too. I was kinda trying for a wavey feel. Appreciate the feedback.
Keep doing what feels right to you! When reading this I felt "Cutting through all the bullshit and finding who I really am"
Ok, that settles it :)
The format of the piece helps me feel the internal distortion. It's like I am trying to complete a thought that refuses to make sense of itself.
Y'all are being too kind. I wish the words fit the image better tbh. But then the question is, is the poem the image or is the image the poem? Idk!
I like the wavy version more. It is gives it the static fuzz.
Loved the Burroughs vibes in this one! And though I get the radio waves graphic element, I preferred reading the traditional version
I should probably know but do you have examples? I'll dig in!
Sorry, but examples of what?
Of which Burroughs works to which you referred. Or maybe it was a title?
Gotcha! He has a lot of interesting recordings:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k5gTM41FJnE
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RVhyOIe1okc
Oh man, wow. Ok. I anticipate loosing a day of my life very soon to this. These are amazing. So glad I asked :) Thank you!
I really like this format, reminds me a bit like the House of Leaves haha
I feel like I've heard of this, but not read it, I'll will add it to the list!
House of Leaves is very crazy good book, you may get confused for the first time, so get prepare for this book before you read
The wavy version was cool. Super creative man!
sweet, thanks :)
I like the wavy version! It opens the poem for more interpretations, and is nice to look at :)
Thanks for that! These visual style always appealed to me, like Lewis Carrols mice poem in Alice in Wonderland.
I should have more confidence, but it was a monday morning after all 😴🥱
The two versions make me *hear* this differently, and sorry, I love both.
Ah, see, I should have stuck to my gut instinct. Thanks for the note!
I LOVE BOTH
I preferred the wavy version: It made me fell like a radio wave being broadcasted - it made me feel like coming into resonance as the structure became tighter.
Dude, thanks, I feel heard.
i loved the words.... but the spaces in between confused me! would you mind explaining it briefly?
Ok, I added the classic formatted one. Which do you prefer?
Yeah, I wasn't sure if it worked, but figured to try it. Maybe I'll post it without the spaces too. I was kinda trying for a wavey feel. Appreciate the feedback.
Another cool usage of spacing all over the poem! Such fire 🔥
You can illustrate beautiful with drawing, I'm only a troglodyte with a space bar :) haha
You showed me the possibilities of creative spacing in poetry, and I can only thank you again!