It's funny you said this. Because as I was reading this back I feel like there could be a version of this that "flows better." And I tried a version where I tweaked it a bit and came back to the original.
So there could be a version of this that is "better" but I did feel it was very "in tune" when I clicked publish. But maybe that's what we should be trying for anyway.
Thanks Joseph. Some of these older ones I felt I was getting this anger out. It's still there to a degree, but I feel inclined to make it a main focus. Or it just manifests in other ways.
Your anti-war poems are some of my favorite poetry on substack. Keep it up!
Thank you JP, very kind and encouraging to say. I appreciate it!
That second stanza was intense, I had to stop and come back to it! Strong poem!
Well, if it ruins hot dogs for you -- consider it a nutritional gift :)
It's hard not to read this in your actual voice!
It's funny you said this. Because as I was reading this back I feel like there could be a version of this that "flows better." And I tried a version where I tweaked it a bit and came back to the original.
So there could be a version of this that is "better" but I did feel it was very "in tune" when I clicked publish. But maybe that's what we should be trying for anyway.
Thanks Alexander!
Chilling
Thanks Joseph. Some of these older ones I felt I was getting this anger out. It's still there to a degree, but I feel inclined to make it a main focus. Or it just manifests in other ways.