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Simon's avatar

"bit rot" is a sick visual. Really nice, Josh!

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Josh Datko's avatar

Like stale bread perhaps :)

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James Hart's avatar

Nice work with the audio! I don't think they were overdone; rather they were very fitting!

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Danny Maldonado's avatar

The voice effects were excellent

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and now Miguel's avatar

Really love the audio work Josh! This is dope.

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Josh Datko's avatar

Ah yeah thanks! Voice effects are easy to overdo but also so fun 😁

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and now Miguel's avatar

And the meter, the rhythm of this poem. It really moves well. I hear you on the part of voice effects can easily be over done, but this has a good use of the effect, the quality of the audio is really really good, and the effects really add to the poem—like it is artistically intentional as opposed to just being effects in themselves. Really nice job Josh!

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Josh Datko's avatar

Well, thank you 😊

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Allison Taylor Conway's avatar

This was a WHOLE SCENE, Analog Josh. Very cool.

I actually really enjoyed the poem--straight. Like a shot. No context other than the poem and your wild reading. HHmmm something to be said for the shorter stuff, no less rich.

Or maybe I'm just a sucker for your great poetry. :) Loved it!

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Josh Datko's avatar

Thanks :) Yeah, I think we were definitely talking about this and I was still thinking of that mechanical watch one — then I was getting a bit upset trying to find some picture on my phone and then out popped this one.

We need to do something though because leaving someone your google photos password is kinda lame.

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Rea de Miranda's avatar

You are leaving behind a great legacy, Josh!

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Josh Datko's avatar

Thanks Rea! :)

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Daniel V. Gaglio's avatar

The voice over really takes this poem to another level

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Josh Datko's avatar

Thanks Daniel! Yeah, I fun with this one :)

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Gavin Charles Penson's avatar

That audio is exceptionally well made and very original. Enjoyed that quite a bit

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Josh Datko's avatar

Ah thanks Gavin, appreciate you reading and listening! I like to experiment with the two being a bit different as there things one can do in audio that can play with the ideas in the poem perhaps.

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DJMP's avatar

In the time of the unreal, it's nice to have physical reminders of your existence. Analog forever.

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Josh Datko's avatar

Haha, yeah I saw briefly your essay on Lynch and saw some references to digital detox like things but I haven't fully read it -- looking forward to it though!

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DJMP's avatar

Excited to hear your thoughts Josh!

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Simon Prasse's avatar

I like this poem very creative however there are some parts I didn't feel flowed to well, like: "typewritten typo'd poems. Its pretty creative not gonna lie, but poems IMO doesn't fit with the flow of what you're going for, I'd advice "words" instead. Sorry for my nitpicking you got a good voice though

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Simon's avatar

The hard "o" in poem flows well after typo'd, though. It depends on how you read it.

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Josh Datko's avatar

Oh I see. Yeah, hmmm, in my mind and in my reading I do pronounce it a bit more like "pome" which I'm not sure where I picked up.

Despite being trained in nuclear reactors, I also pronounce nuclear like homer simpson and this pissed off many Naval officers -- to the point they wanted to give me speech lessons haha. The military is insane. Anyway, habits are hard to break.

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Josh Datko's avatar

It's all good. Thanks for reading and the feedback!

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