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Ellis Wiens's avatar

I'm a simple man: I see alliteration, I adore it. These descriptions of natural phenomena laced with computer terminology is a curious thing, but then again I visualized it all via a screen anyway. Perhaps it's a bit of a meta-poem that way.

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Josh Datko's avatar

Yeah, that’s what kind of drove this one — curiosity. It started out as a nature poem but I felt there was strong parallel with a technological one. I gave up on it, and then came back to it, gave up on it, and came back to it.

It’s one that I think would be better suited in an appropriate collection — which is always the challenge of posting here — but I liked it nonetheless.

But I appreciate you reading and the thoughtful comment!

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Elijah A. Colomer's avatar

Took the words right out of my mouth, it was such an interesting dynamic

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Josh Datko's avatar

Thanks! I was trying something a bit different with this one, appreciate you giving it a read!

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Benno's avatar

Beautiful, loved the liminal texture of the poem,

Glitchy grasshoppers

flee the field of fuel

where I stand frozen.

Is almost an stand alone haiku, very NICE!

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Josh Datko's avatar

Forms within forms! Thanks Benno, appreciate you reading. Hope all the movie club calls are going well, I only heard good things about them.

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Daniel V. Gaglio's avatar

Reminds me of the long weekend I just had upstate

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Ch!llN0w1's avatar

💜

I can taste the approach and feel the build here....

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Josh Datko's avatar

appreciate that!

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